sits against me an empty broken chair,
midnight shivers in the shivering cold,
a nicotinic smoke chasing the air.
A distant radio plays the music of the nineties,
those rowdy, nonsensical, chaotic songs,
songs that sing through the chambers of my age,
parts of which my nostalgia lives on.
I stand intensely engaged in a monologue,
reaching out to every unvisited corner of me,
disturbed by a plenty atrocities in the dark sky above,
resurrecting as the silence I fake to be.
The smell of a young omelette on a fry pan,
mixed with the drizzle on the outskirts of Bombay,
equipped with Pink Floyd, Eliot, and Einstein,
yet the lunatic's Delhi seems far away.
She creeps into a thunder of events, which
follows me from a city to another,
I am nothing more than a blinded nothingness,
trembling on a path to where we are together.
Also published in the October 2011 edition of Kritya - available here.
41 comments:
its really well written mihir.... finally one that i could understand :P ... kiddin ... but yea ... nice one :)
WoW, this one is good, really well written.. ( expressed what we discussed and ur mind ) .. and dun wrry, it will be ok.. :)
amazing... speclly th delhi part..I loved it...
straight from the heart....
too good!!
straight from the heart....
too good!!
Badhiya hai. Umda!!
Badhiya hai. Umda!!
Badhiya hai. Umda!!
This is a good one! well, an observation : your writing just gets better and more frequent whenever i am away. Anyway, its very sweet.
rlly well return...i envy ur choice of words..:)
This is a good one. Well, i think you write better whenever i am away and more often too. Anyway, it's very sweet!
P.S : I'll come back soon. So, write as much as you can in these days. :)
dude its nice yaar...delhi part ya too good...amazing how u put it in...
Good one bro!
@ All of you: Thanks a ton. Feedback, as usual, is the greatest encouragement. More so when people repeat the same comments. :p
Honestly, thank you. :)
@ Bhavi: That sounds promising.
lovely.. :)
nice one mihir
hey good work .keep it up. u hv gr8 imagination power.
very niice mehir n i agree its totally frm the heart n i gv bhavi some credit fr giving u the motivation :)keep feeding ur creative side...
hey great work...i could feel the atmosphere u created in writing
:)..lovely..:)..nice one
cheers mihir.
killa ...straight from the heart.
hey naaaice.....
m still thinkin...bout sm o d lines.....:))
my over-stressed Gre filled brains can only find spelling mistakes. See i made a different comment than others. but still I stand by what I said that day Mihir - you can fill an entire gamut of emotions in a poem than in a story.
reallyy a classic one...
reallyyy a good one....
Thank you guys. Thanks a lot :)
well penned my friend...great job
hhmm.. well written!!
really nice one dude... keep it up... use such simple language so gujju people like me can understand...
@ Malcom and Abhishek: Thanks.
@ Shreyans: hahahaha. Thanks.
bhaari hain
Its like old wine..your writing...just keeps getting better by the day..I loved the way your words infuse life, into the most mundane things..!
welcome...
very fine tuned piece.
A++
My goodness this was just pure loveliness, the story, the penning, the metaphors, just fluidly beautiful.
enjoy the rally!
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Great images you create here. I love the 'young omelette'!
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keep the good work coming friend
this hit me pretty close, for one i live in hope and dread for monsoon season every year. a kaleidoscope of emotions, and thoughts, in both. thank you. :)
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love it! my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/01/21/remain/
Thank you guys. I'm overjoyed to read your comments.
Its was amazing .. You write so well
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